Air and Space Museam is the most famour museam in Washington, DC. Smithsonian National Air and Space museum has the largest collection of historic air and spacecraft in the world. It is also a important center for research into the history, science, and technology of space flight.The collection includes more than 30,000 aviation-related and more than 9,000 space related artifacts. You don't have a thesis statement. What is your focus?
You don't have a topic sentence. When I first get in the museam, the first thing I saw was airplanes every where. There are two airplanes are hanging on the ceiling. They looks like flying in the sky. Free Docent-led tours highlight the Museum's collection and trace the history of air and space travel. Tours are open to the general public and occur daily at both Museum locations. Docent Tours at the National Mall building depart from the Welcome. Docent Tours at the Steven F. Udvar-Hazy Center depart from the Docent Tours Desk in the Boeing Aviation Hangar Center.The real life models of the different aircraft were facinating. I was so excited knowing the stories behind World War II and the first flight around the world. There are different rooms in the Air and Space Museam. Each and individual room displace different collections of the Air and Space Museam. I really found very resourceful information in the room number 105 and 106. Room number 105 is about the jet aviation where I learn lot about the jet aviation and the room is decorated by the jet engines and antic jets. The room is sub divided into small rooms and with dark light. Whereas room number 106 is the golden age of jet aviation. There are many chairs inside the room 104, it's because it's a movie theather for the whole museam.
There were visitors from different places of the world. They are waiting on the line to get into the museam to all these collections from the air. Everyone seems so curious and excited seeing those collection of historic stuff. Most of the children were attracted towards the jets, planes and rockets. As soon as they saw big space ship in the loby, they are screeming louly. Old people were busy and excited taking photographs in the entrance of the museum. I saw students taking down the notes for the information in room 105 and in the entrance. It could be for their projects as well. I preferd this place the most because of the wonderful displays of airplanes, especially the Wright Brothers plane being in the eye catcher in the front of the museum.
It is the perfect place for people of all ages. It is the wonderful place to spend time in Washington DC. The place is not only wonderful but more than that very knowledgeable. Physical environment attracted the people in the museum. Wonderful airplanes, big picture of the man in the space, rockets, jets influenced people to take pcitures and felt them so resourceful knowing the information about the past and what's happening around the world.
Group Member:
*Amy
*Yan Zhi
Outline
1.Introduction
2. Physical Description
Overall physical description of the building and room number 105 and 106.
3.Social Description
Students, young couples and old peoples
4.Conclusion
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Comments (7)
Anonymous said
at 12:29 am on Oct 11, 2007
I think the physical description is not stated enough. And you didn’t clarify of who was there, you just said everyone but you didn’t specify well.
Anonymous said
at 4:15 pm on Oct 12, 2007
YAN zhi your group should maybe write in the beginning of your introduction the Smithsonian National air and space museum! You need an article! To attract your reader try to come up with an introduction that has a hook.Something unique I mean! BE SPECIFIC ABOUT THE STORIES BEHIND world WAR 2 !Tell us what happened!
Third paragraph is “ I prefered “ grammar mistake! I ‘ve watched the movie of the Wright Brothers!!very interesting! Try to extend your conclusion and add transitional words in your essay!! Just little things to add up, it is a good essay!
Anonymous said
at 12:01 am on Oct 13, 2007
I think that you have the potential to do a good essay. Easily, you can atract and keep the reader interested in your article as Othmane said. First at all, the Museum itself is unique, wonderful, funny and fascinating. It is not possible don't have a personal connection with one of the exhibits. To flight had been always our dream. To reach our beautiful moon was for thousand years our "impossible dream". I like to much your comments about children. I did not pay atention on this aspect when I edited our American Indiam Museum's essay. Keep it up! Go ahead! You can do it, guys!
Anonymous said
at 2:57 pm on Oct 29, 2007
Hi! this assay is intresting. I have always been atracted by planes and how they work. What was intresting to me is room 106 about the World War II,only if you could write more about it. Also, I found intresting what you mentioned about the Wright brothers and the first flight,but again you need to write more and give more examples. I think you have very litle grammar mistakes that need some attention, like article usage in the first paragraph. On the first paragraph you need to work on the phisical location and description of the place. You are doing a good job, keep it up. God bless.
Anonymous said
at 5:13 pm on Oct 29, 2007
This is a very interesting site for people interesting in technology and history. That's why I was disappointed by the lack of detail in the description of the museum's content. You give a list of room numbers and a general indication of what is found in them, and that's it! You summarize the main exhibits, but you need to elaborate.
Anonymous said
at 6:25 pm on Oct 29, 2007
hello hello!!
I think that you should of talked more about the airplanes, the fact that you started talking about non-intersting things,like the rooms and how people would like it,lost me.
Your essay should consider people who don't know anything about the history of The Air and Space Museum.
In terms of the graphics, there was only one and I could not see it.
Anonymous said
at 3:54 pm on Oct 30, 2007
I always love airplanes and others spacecraft. You organized this pretty well but you need to give more details to this place for example, describe more vividly about the airplane, place, etc... Also, you need to put at least two interesting pictures. The next time if I have a chance to go to Washington D.C. I will definately visit the Air and Space Museum.
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